My first draft is complete, and it even surprises me that it looks the way it is! It took some time to work on, seriously, but I officially have about 4 and a third pages of writing for my essay on traveling. After going through that workshop yesterday, I have to say that I am personally surprised at not only the feedback I got, but on how I reviewed myself as well. I say that because I am too hard on my own work, not kidding. I really do overjudge my own works of literature, and I always have.
The feedback that I received was good enough for me. I think that my challenges right now are to go ahead and try and make my own points make a little more sense to me. They show the points about my blogger I'm following in the paper, but it doesn't appear until much later in the paper than it is supposed to. I think I need to try and fix that, and bring it more forward in the work. If you have seen the draft, can I get some help, please?
-Jake
I remember thinking that your draft was good, and just needed some fine-tuning. I don't recall you really delving into the identity of the blogger, though, which is kind of the point of the essay. I think I only read the first two pages, though, right? Send me the rest of the draft at emvbolam@uw.edu and I'll get back to you with more comments!
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